Future Football Star - What do you think?

[Wags374]

Please critque this layout! Is it too campy? Too busy? Does it need something? Did I mess up the spelling? :D

http://www.pixentral.com/hosted/19akFeAEEzPWmxgrfpTl3ilceOwxW_thumb.jpg (http://www.pixentral.com/show.php?picture=19akFeAEEzPWmxgrfpTl3ilceOwxW)

Papers: "Football" kit by Atomic Cupcake
Title font: Troglodyte

[Rusty]

Jane,

For my taste, it's not campy and not too busy. But I think it's kinda flat looking. I have made no secret on this Forum of my love for vibrant colors.

I wouldn't go neon :), but I would consider something with a little more punch to it than the green background you are using. If the PJs were bright, the background would be OK.

Rusty

[jojo99]

Hi Jane,
Your picture is beautiful, well done.
Rusty does have a point, brightening up the green might make the boys stand out a little more.
If you go with a colour change try for a lighter green or maybe try picking out the yellow/orange from the PJ's, although personally I think a lighter green would swing it :)
Jo-Jo

[Wags374]

Thanks for the input - I'll try punching up the green a little bit. It is supposed to look like a grass football field. :)

[AngelicKim]

Jane, it looks great. My thought on the green background is that it should look more like a football field with the white yard lines. Not to bright a white, maybe a reduced opacity to it but it may just be what it needs to brighten up a little and not look so dull.

[kroberts]

Jane,

How cute!:) I love the caption! I think the green you used fits the page, but agree with Kim that maybe some "yard lines" with a chalk effect might add more to the green.

[tbrannon]

Jane this is way too cute. That caption is just the greatest.
I love this.

I like the idea of the yard lines and there is a paper in that kit with the yard lines. How perfect it would be. The green is bolder in it. But dropping the opacity would be perfect. :)

I love that caption, I had to sneak another peak.
My big smile of the day. THANKS!

[John L Gray]

Jane,

I like the layout! The only change I would make is " Future Football Stars"

Great work.


John

[AngelicKim]

John, that would be so, but the photo isn't twins. It's one boy, two images.

Jane, if there is a paper with the yard lines, give it a try.

[Wags374]

Here is version two.... I punched up the color of the green and added some white lines to it. (on another layer and drop the opacity done to about 60%) The playing field that was included in the gridiron set was just to dark of green.

Oh and yes I only have one son! I can only imagine the destruction and mayhem that would follow if there were two of him - at 15 months he was in th 95% percentile for height and weight. He has already figured out how to drop a shoulder and throw a pretty impressive tackle! :eek: He is 17 months old today - and I don't think his growth is slowing down much if any.

http://www.pixentral.com/hosted/1AfUk7Z2DZPmBASLdMRKOwsQ4wKlS_thumb.jpg (http://www.pixentral.com/show.php?picture=1AfUk7Z2DZPmBASLdMRKOwsQ4wKlS)

I like this new version a whole lot better - thanks for all your suggestions. :)

[AngelicKim]

Jane, now that looks much better.

[Rusty]

Yep, I like it a lot.
Isn't it funny how just the slightest change in hue and/or saturation can make such a difference.

Rusty:)

[tbrannon]

Jane, the little something that made a big difference.
PERFECT!

[Wendy]

Hi Jane ...

Oh that is excellent ... I love the effect and the chages you made are perfect :)

Wendy

[msbrad]

Jane,
Just found this thread. I really like the changes you've made to the second one. It is darling.
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[hukari]

That last one has all of its ":)I"s dotted and its "T"s crossed. Perfect!

[jojo99]

Jane,
Version 2 is perfect, I love it.
Well done :)

[Wags374]

Thanks everyone! I've been scrapping like a mad woman the past 24 hours and am finally caught up on my son's baby book - I think....

Need to put the finishing touches on my daughters book (birth - 3rd birthday) will probably be right around a 100 pages. Trying to double check all of my spelling...... :D

Some of those first layouts are not the greatest, (I was so new to elements and scrapping) think I might just have to make some minor tweeks. :)